请高手改考研作文。04年,终点又是新起点

Asisvividlydepictedinthepicturethatanathleterunningontheplayground.Thefinishinglineisunderhisfeet.Therearetwoarrows,oneisdestination,andanotherisstartingpoint.Hewillbesuc... As is vividly depicted in the picture that an athlete running on the playground. The finishing line is under his feet. There are two arrows, one is destination, and another is starting point. He will be successful and remarkably happy.
The best is the last and the last is the start. -----William Shakespeare. The picture reveals that success is not end but is another begins. Successful, means flower, applause and praise. Beginning means hard, barrier and insist. So when we achieved success, we want to rest, entertain rather than go on work. But life always continues.
Over the years, the end as beginning has largely been ignored by us. Li Ming, My classmate and good friend. Since his article has published at the newspaper and wins a prize, He is not work hard and play games everyday. Now his essay is extremely bad. Another instance is my sister; she won the “dancer” competition when she was sophomore. But from then on, she looks soup and eats food greedy whole day, now her weight is heavy and can’t dance.
If we win, we have every thing. If we stop our steps, we have nothing.

有三个问题也希望解答一下

1请问大约能得多少分
2我不会写长难句,所以准备每段开头背一个套话,其他就是简单句,这样是否能得个不错的分?
3用的名言是自己编的,莎士比亚不应该说这种罗嗦的英语,是否会降低阅卷老师的心理分?
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There are two arrows, one is destination, and another is starting point.
another改成the other
The best is the last and the last is the start. -----William Shakespeare. The picture reveals that success is not end but is another begins.这里begins改成start. 因为前面有is,后面不能跟begin。

Successful, means flower, applause and praise. sucessful改成sucessfully,副词做状语
Since his article has published at the newspaper and wins a prize, He is not work hard and play games everyday.
wins改成has won 。 现在完成时时态要保持一致
But from then on, she looked soup and ate food greedy whole day, now her weight is heavy and can’t dance.

If we win, we will have every thing. If we stop our steps, we will have nothing.
如果是小作文的话,得5-7分差不多
大作文的话最多不超过12分
即使是简单句也没关系,但注意的是要把握好时态,语态
作文的话偶尔也出一点名言名句没关系,即使是自己编的老师也不会在意

我更希望你能加强时态,语态,因为这篇作文中很多时态你都没有把握好。
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There are two arrows, one is destination, and another is starting point.
another改成the other
The best is the last and the last is the start. -----William Shakespeare. The picture reveals that success is not end but is another begins.这里begins改成start. 因为前面有is,后面不能跟begin。

Successful, means flower, applause and praise. sucessful改成sucessfully,副词做状语
Since his article has published at the newspaper and wins a prize, He is not work hard and play games everyday.
wins改成has won 。 现在完成时时态要保持一致
But from then on, she looked soup and ate food greedy whole day, now her weight is heavy and can’t dance.

If we win, we will have every thing. If we stop our steps, we will have nothing.
如果是小作文的话,得5-7分差不多
大作文的话最多不超过12分
即使是简单句也没关系,但注意的是要把握好时态,语态
作文的话偶尔也出一点名言名句没关系,即使是自己编的老师也不会在意

我更希望你能加强时态,语态,因为这篇作文中很多时态你都没有把握好。
问题1: 看造化吧,,,
问题2: 这个没什么关系,英语的神奇在于很多词可以反复的用,,,
问题3: 没关系,老师基本上都不会看的。

总之,,,时态的问题比较严重啊,,,如果写得工整字体也好辨认的话,估计得个65%的分应该没问题。
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问题1: 看造化吧,,,
问题2: 这个没什么关系,英语的神奇在于很多词可以反复的用,,,
问题3: 没关系,老师基本上都不会看的。

总之,,,时态的问题比较严重啊,,,如果写得工整字体也好辨认的话,估计得个65%的分应该没问题。
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